thedisgruntledfairy

So far its pretty good. Just don't make the paragraphs as long. Make breaks in between so the reader doesn't get bored and lose their place while readin  

AleahKaloni

@Stay_Flirtin thanks im working on the third and its gonna be kinda longer 
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thedisgruntledfairy

@Stay_Flirtin i like the second chapter  so far so good  
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