Nicole

tx fr adding my story 2 u libary

@AliceCole aww thank you very much for the compliments sweetie.

Hey guys I have uploaded the second chapter of my story. Check it out please(: 

@AnonomiaUnknownia I haven't had a chance to read the rest of your stories because I've been working on my story, but I really love, "Seventeen Don't Change A Thing". The suspense and story line is so amazing and you give wonderful detail. And I will definitely be checking out your other stories.

You became a fan?really? you awesome person, what work did u like of mine?

@bridgiekk Thank you so much and I would love to read your story(: 

For ur first story you've done well. You need some work on the grammar but hey so does everyone lol I'm new to wattpad too and if you have a spare minute I'd love you to check out my story the not so secret life if Bridget kasey.
          
          http://www.wattpad.com/1038242-the-not-so-secret-life-of-bridget-kasey
          
          Thanks in advance and keep up the good work I'm voting :)

@Abbey Thank you very much(: 

Nicole, 
          Hi!   Your story sounds fine to me.  There are a couple of run-on sentences, but no major mistakes.  The best way to catch this is to read it to yourself. If you would naturally pause, put a comma ( , )  And if you fully stop, end the sentance and start a new one.  Sentences don't have to be long.  :)   The only things I would change is putting an exclamation point ( ! ) after the "Get the hell off her."  And maybe consider, {since you wrote it like you're the one telling the story}, change the name to Finding Myself.  Just a thought.  :)   Feel free to take or discard any of my random thoughts, and thank you for asking me to read your story. 
          ~Abbey

Hey Guys!
          I would really appreciate if you read my story, it's the first I've ever published and I could use critiques. So yeah.
          Thank you!
          Alice Cole