AllergicToSilence

@SummerBreath Thank you so much:) Your seriously just the pep talk I've needed.

Candle_Ice

HEY! ... i jus read the first chapter and I really liked it! ...I will def be reading more! =) ... btw what fan fic is it, i can't figure it out from just the 1st chapter =)....i think I saw it was under fan fic and teen fic [?] or was I not seeing rite?? o.O
          lol... take care!

EffieChaumont

hello there, You commented on my story and asked me to read your story and let you know what I think. First off, I'm going to say this now, do not (and I repeat DO NOT) get defensive about anything that I say. I will tell you what my opinion is and what my thoughts/beliefs are when it comes to syntax, diction, characters, and flow. If you have a problem with anything that I say, (and I'll try and say it as nicely as I can without sugar coating it) please take it up with me personally and not through your story. I'm sorry if this is demanding but I'm tired of people asking for advice and not even listening. 
          
          Would you still like me to read your story and give my advice/feedback?