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Its when you restate sth using different words. For example, "blood" can be 
          " crimson liquid".
          
          You need to read about certain basics. This is one of them. Another is personification.
          
          Hope this helps.

Thanks! But what do you mean paraphrasing?

Just make sure that the story is continued and it flows nice. Grammer/spelling check helps too :-)

@IsnavysP Will do my best to give feedback. But to be honest idk how to review poems...

My poem Hurt and Confessions! :-) And if you want to read anything else, if your interested, go ahead! I accept HARD critiques. It makes my writing better ;) I'm practicing for the FCAT writes! Lol.

@IsnavysP Sure give me a few minutes. Is there sth in specific you want me to read?!

Check my writing out? It'd mean a lot!

@OmarKhan Hey! Just wanna point sth: this is just my opinion. Don't let anyone impair ur vision.
          
          That being said...
          
          1.  Soldiers never forget what has been carved into memory.
          2 and 3: Will go back and re-read 2morow as I'm really sleepy.
          4. Thing is with writing, it has to be close to reality so the reader believes it and not too real so it wouldn't be boring.
          
          Perfect example for Fantasy/Military:
          
          The Hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy Series by Douglas Adams.
          
          Lord of The Rings (Books or Movie).
          
          Hope that helps for now. Have a great night:)

OK here's what you posted:
          
          'I just have a few comments: 1. I think the 1st thing any military affiliated man/woman would do when wounded; is lie still and check for broken bones, ribs..etc.
          
          2. If ur switching from 1st person to 3rd person, use a different font/color. 
          3. Try to avoid "ly". It weakens the image. ( I have the same problem...brr)
          4. Oooh and usually these kind of people speak in short, concise sentences.'
          
          Point 1, that's a very good point, IDK why I didn't think of that, but also I wanted to show that Kae was in a very vulnerable state of mind, he wasn't thinking clearly at all.
          
          2: When do I do that? Could you please point it out to me?
          
          3:I totally understand what you mean, but again could you please point out and example of that to me?
          
          4: Well it's not your typical military now is it? They're elves :P

@OmarKhan Ohio Omar-chin!!
          
          Sure I don't mind helping(if I can). Fire away either on my wall, ur wall, PM whatever you like ^_^