PierceTheHorizonSWS6
Hey you really need to expand some things in Ethereal. They seem to compacted together. Maybe add details to some things and create a layout of each chapter like I am doing with my book. It's really good and I would love to read more!
PierceTheHorizonSWS6
@AnimeVampireGal1 well you need to describe things more. How she is feeling and instead of making her suspicious of someone killing her parents make her find out later that someone unexpected did. Also i have a suggestion, make a few newer characters to have conflicting love interests. Make people pick sides for who she would be better off with and choose. Dont do it to quickly though. Then it will be obvious as to what you are trying to do.
