@AmmaraYounas
Hello there!
I don't know if you take reading requests but if you have a few seconds to spare, would you mind checking out my poetry collection "Secret of the shadows"?
Please feel to drop it if its not to your liking.
Also please feel free to decline.
Thank you! Have a great day/ night ahead☆
I hope you share your poems again.
@AmmaraYounas "self portrait as god holding the dead in his palms" was a great piece. The line "i kiss the filth in my palms" was such a perfect summation. What made you decide to format the work in a block text with backslashes?
@AmmaraYounas I actually read all of the ones on your link. You are a fantastic poet and I really like your use of subtlety! Do you have a book for sale? I thought your structure work on "exit earth" was expertly done. It was honestly inspiring so I'll probably try to use space to create impact at some point, but it's gonna have to fit the piece. I pay a lot of attention to rhythm and melody so a lot of my work is trying to tap into those invisible elements of poetry and I never know how it reads. If you're interested in rhythm, I'd appreciate your feedback. I'm curious to know how the structuring came across in "Forest of Pain." https://www.wattpad.com/1485367777-original-poems-2024-forest-of-pain I played around with motifs in "Sweet Teeth" https://www.wattpad.com/1485169667-original-poems-2024-sweet-teeth as well as in "Summer Death" https://www.wattpad.com/1467999408-original-poems-2024-summer-death Most of the poems in my current collection are strong, but I'm still experimenting. I don't think a lot of the work I wrote in September wasn't great, but I was really depressed. This is my first year getting serious about poetry so I'm trying hard to learn and I'm open to criticism. https://www.wattpad.com/story/372697997-original-poems-2024
@novelistASH hi Ash, no need to go on Instagram, really, it's an exhausting platform. It means a lot to me that you read not one, but three of my poems!! Thank you so much for that and your kind words. About the formatting of "exit earth", I don't really think about formatting all that much. The many words and stanzas just come together while writing. How it looks visually is usually how it is contextually—for instance, in the case of the floating corpse in space, I arranged the words in a way that they'd look like they're floating or dancing midair. In another instance, I added spaces between the letters of a word (mukti) to convey its meaning (spiritual liberation). The other separations and stanza breaks are used for dramatic effect, to let the reader take a breather, to separate different ideas, or to connect the two. Also, I'd like to read your stuff as well. Which of your collections should I start with?
thanks. hope you're well.
thank you for your follow, ammarayounas. (:
just dropping by to say hi:)
hope you're fine..
a new part to nocturne
https://www.wattpad.com/story/223321027
Thank you so much for following me, Ammara, and for reading from Bliss Station:)
@AmmaraYounas arre tareef milri hai to le lo:)) but yeah, honestly, one of the best I've read. Hope you and yours are safe
Hello people! I'm back. I hope you all are doing okay. I wrote something and I would greatly appreciate it if someone reads it and gives me some feedback.
https://www.wattpad.com/story/223321027
Heya!
thank you for the kind visit. I appreciate your reads, votes and comments on Forbidden Strawberry and Blowing Bubbles. :)))