@justingame44 The concept is a good one. There have been a lot of fanfics using this idea, I believe a couple are on wattpad but the rest are on sites like Ao3 and Fanfiction.net. The writing format is very simple one without any unique features.
The plot for the one-shot is a decent one but is a very short one. The grammar and punctuation needs a lot of working. Make the writing more descriptive else it feels very boring or uninteresting. Try to use a wide vocabulary when you can.
The preview is also just not that attractive. A well written preview is what attracts people to fanfics. If you were to look at the more popular ones by authors like Vala411 or HarryPanther, they give a good hint that makes people curious or interested in going further and reading it.
That's all I can think of right now.
