No, not at all! I'm just saying that I used to write like this before, because now I write in more complicated ways...and also, it could use improvement. I'm just saying that there are many characters, so it would be a bit confusing if all of them would talk at the same time, or if you keep track on all of them at the same time. Also, I noticed that you constantly switch from past to present tense. If you do that, the readers get confused if the story's happening now or it's happened already. But I think that, if you take my advice and improve your story further, you'll have a more smashing story that will really catch the attention of readers. I really like your idea of the 5 kids with their own elemental power, and the idea of the Element King. I want to see the chapters! :D
