I'm a twenty-three year old who has dreamed of being a writer and yet the dream escapes me as my poor creative mind has been draped in the dust of society's expectations. 
Please give me honest feedback on my work as I am always trying to improve and create new and enjoyable stories for many different audiences. It's been a while since I've gone through a proper class on creative writing and all its glory, therefore if would spare my feelings I would most graciously appreciate it.