Hey, I read as far as chapter 7. Looking at the plot only. I like it. I can see what is happening in my mind. That's important. you are doing a good job of letting the reader know what people are feeling not just what is happening.
A couple times I was confused. I think in chapter 4 maybe. I didn't understand who the people on the bridge were. Maybe I missed something there. In the same chapter, I wonder why I would run to a helicopter ladder that appeared from no where. I think I might be suspicious that the helicopter had something to do with the explosions. Maybe the helicopter should land and a person on it waves them to come to safety. Maybe it has markings that indicate it's a rescue helicopter. I don't know, just stuck out to me. Remember your readers will believe anything as long as you give them a reason to.
Another question. On the plane the stewardess refers to opening windows? The boy has money for plane tickets but not for a bus ticket in town? Maybe one quick line that says he spent all his money on the plane tickets? Again I may not have understood. I am going to keep following your book. I want to find out why they needed to go to Italy.
I hope I don't sound like I'm picking things apart. I'm glad that I have a couple people I trust, to critique my writing. I'm just trying to pass along the favor. happy writing.
I published a new prologue in my story, Haven. Felt like without it the first chapter was jumping in to fast. If you get a chance I would love to hear what you think.
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