In the Life Gives You Lemons novella that I'm entering in the ONC, the point of view has been switched from third person to first person. I have rewritten the first chapter to reflect this change.
Here is a sample from the new chapter.
Cass answered on the fifth ring. Her "Hey, Mom," sounded winded to my ears.
"Are you having a party?"
"Nope. I'm on the treadmill."
"You're running and talking at the same time? God, I wish I had your stamina."
"What do you want Mom?"
"Nice Cass. Just making sure the house hasn't burned down."
"Funny. Oh, a package came for you today."
"What kind of package?"
"A big one from Omni Corp."
Dammit, they sent the robot to my house. It was supposed to be shipped to my lair but the idiots screwed up the order. "Just set it aside. I'll open it when I get home."
"Uh, Mom. It's too heavy to move. Plus, the package is blocking the front door. It's well--you need to see this for yourself."
"Send me a picture." As the photo uploaded, I filled Barb in.
She shook her head. "Unbelievable. Those idiots will get a strongly worded complaint from me. I swear I sent the correct address."
"I'm sure you did."
I sucked in a breath as I glanced at my phone. The robot was already assembled. Six feet of handsome hunk, eight packed abs, flawless caramel skin. Eyes a piercing blue. Hair the color of a crow's wing. All the anatomical parts were there and well endowed.
Aghast, I covered the speaker. "They sent me a sex robot," I sotto voced. "To my house! Naked! With my kids there."
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Now that I have your attention...