@pepperbleu No your writing shows what sasuke could be when no is around him after all every intorvet true personality come out to the person most close to them and with sense privacy and trust. In most of other fanfic they never hardly change the of narration and charaters internal thoughts they just the facade of sasuke keeping struggling with his emotions until end of the chapter then he has of leave sakura again I can understand the point of love story , and how plot moves like this and because of it hurt to read many fanfic that revolves around the same idea and ending but few are peak just like this though i don't prefer AUs but few are good like a non massacre and what if he would not leave the village. your one is already good enough it just needs more involvement of other charater like what was happening the village there POVs but it still good enough to ignore but i would love see those POVs in upcoming chapters if you are facing problem regarding this you can conversation with us(readers) for suggestions fell free to ask us but still the story is going well.
And as always will be waiting for news chapters.
I wish you well <3
