Hey! Anxshka!!
So glad I read your book and I love it.
My tip for you is if you're writing a book,
You should.
•Avoid prose or telling a story
•Use Metaphor more often, I mean You can use other figurative languages but Metaphor is the most important in them because it holds more feeling for the reader.
•Use formal words, Poetry is a formal writing piece you should learn how to dodge those informal.
I hope you understand and thank you for requesting me to critique your works. You can also check my words if you like.