Aoi160908

Alabaster reckoning is out. Please go check it out. 
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/373176547

Aoi160908

Lots of grammatical mistakes, please review your chapters thoroughly from the starting  and also you need to work on the dialogues. The story has a nice plot but it can be made better by adding more expressive description of the surroundings, the place where the scene takes place, internal monologues and more display of emotions that actually go together, like in the first chapter for example, what she said to her father was sarcastic but sarcasm and tears don't go together. Insted you can use the term snarky remark and angry tears and so on. No offense to your fan fic but it would have been better to use original fictional characters instead of real life people and "y/n"....hope it helps.

ROSSYTHV07

I would love to read your feedback

Aoi160908

@ROSSYTHV07 you can make changes.  Just unpublish your story for a while, improve it and repost. None of your veiws or votes will be removed.
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ROSSYTHV07

Oh ok yes I felt it too as I read my story again and I can't change it now...the thing Rm couldn't marry is that he already loved lia and that's why he wasn't interested in marriage too but it's my fault not mentioning it properly and as it's my first book and also I had a big confusion of this story while writing it...I wasn't able to write it properly as I imagined....But anyways thank you so much for telling me this which I would improve it if I write another story...
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Aoi160908

@ROSSYTHV07 I don't want to sound arrogant there. You've got a nice plot obviously, with so much recognition but, it can be made better. I just wanted to mention one more thing, the reasons why RM couldn't marry Y/N and why she had to marry in their family are kind of irrelevant. Cuz whatever the problem in US was,  it could have been handled by his father or some trusted employee. You can change it to something like he already has a love interest and argues that tae doesn't so he should be the one.
            Then there is Y/N's case, you can do it like insted of her parents forcing her, it was Jimin as he knew tae loves her and she loves him back. No offense though d=(´▽｀)=b
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