@Matthe0_Riddle Hey, I'm back. I know it was quick, but I can already see that there are some slight problems with your writing. Full warning, I am not trying to be rude, so please don't be mad ow discouraged when you see my comments, your writing has gotten so many reads, and it's intriguing. First of all, your grammar is a bit off, and my OCD is killing me when your capital letters grew legs and walked out of your writing. You do tend to repeat words, for example, when you are writing dialogue, you will tend to use, Mattheo said, and Enzo said, try to mix up the words and add words like "whispered, feeling his cool breath, or warm breath down my neck as he spoke", "yelled", "mumbled" and stuff like that. You can also add more description, it will be make your story more fun to read, and your readers will have a better chance of making and imaging the story in their head, you can sometimes even spark their own creativity, although I have never done that. I know that this might be obvious but, don't put yourself down, have faith, believe in yourself. I'm pretty sure that you will be able to write like a professional one day, it just takes time and practice. If you look at my books that I have made, they will say that they have been posted at the same time, but I had written them at different times, experimenting what style of writing I am best at, and what genre is more exciting for me to write.
