Artemis

hii
          
          i don’t wanna be that person but to make ur stories better you shouldn’t have everything in one paragraph because it gets kinda confusing
          
          like when somebody is talking that should be a separate paragraph so it should be like
          
          “brook we leave in five”
          
          then you make a new paragon
          
          “thank you five”
          
          it just makes everything less confusing :)