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            Hi, I have rewritten the first chapter. Can you tell me if I have written it correctly this time or not? I don’t mean that you have to read the whole chapter—just check if it should be written like this.please Just tell me whether this is correct or more changes are needed. 

@Y0url0ca1F5n Yes, I read your story, it is good. 

@Y0url0ca1F5n Hi can I ask  did you read my stories