AstronomicalBell

Okay so, I'm starting a book that may or may not be a fanfic because I'm suddenly getting back into a fandom from middle school. I wrote a line and I need advice on it.
          	"As much as I LOVE to see the fear written across your face, your screams are a plague to my ears. Now be a good PET and keep that little mouth of yours shut, or else you'll find yourself missing an organ once you wake up."
          	I can't tell if I like it or hate it.

AstronomicalBell

Okay so, I'm starting a book that may or may not be a fanfic because I'm suddenly getting back into a fandom from middle school. I wrote a line and I need advice on it.
          "As much as I LOVE to see the fear written across your face, your screams are a plague to my ears. Now be a good PET and keep that little mouth of yours shut, or else you'll find yourself missing an organ once you wake up."
          I can't tell if I like it or hate it.