Mahmoud-Hussainy

hey
          I think your story is pretty good 
          the lore is god and your imagination is good
          but i think that is lacks something is in its appearance and shape that well make it a lot better if it achieved
          and just for the clearing i want nothing from u im just advising u to make it perfect
          my advice is: make it less condensed 
          like u have to make every paragraph half its size now
          and then rearrange the chapters upon the new shape and that will give u a whole 14th chapter
          and it will make it a more comfortable for the eye while reading than now.
          this was my advice for u i hope it helps
          honestly i didn't read the it but the description gave me the idea and i think u made a will description and a well idea and that what makes me wants to help u.
          and i even can help u get a better cover u want, i can do that and again im saying that's not for money, im just enjoying  it.
          good luck.

Atoq_Takiri

Thank you. I’ll see what I can do about such. Your feedback is appreciated. This is just a concept story atm so of course, there is room for change and I am still learning more things. For now, I’ll be focusing on getting to know my story more so I can better understand how to write it. All I wanted to achieve with why I have written so far is to get an idea of how a book could go.
            
            I’ll be going away soon for a while but, I’ll return again soon.
            
            There is still much more to be done here. UTS won’t be finished until I see it on the big screen someday thus I’ll make sure it ends up being worthy of such. I don’t have a team to work with, it’s be mostly me and occasionally some ideas from friends but I can only do so much.
            
            Anyways, I’ll return again soon.
            
            Thank you
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