@Avakateshow2015
Bluemoonkitty thank advice from Avakates wrighting because yours it totes boring and which you need advice she might miss some proper grammar thats what makes her stories cool more exciteing and epic she has that pop of color she has pop words on the other hand your is boring zzzzZZZZZZZ you make me snore
i love your books their awesome i wish i where u u are totes cool i am totes jelly of u i love your books
Which story
Are U going to update soon
The story lost boy is under romance
I made a new story called the lost boy a song inspired me
Remember you can post messages and please vote for me
Thinks guys for following me ! I am happy and excited about this. I am talking in reference to the following and reading my story's
Thanks so much for following me! :) I hope you enjoy reading We Survivors!
why did you put BlueMoonKitty and there needs to be a description, kk?
@BlueMoonKitty10 you did better, but the only three problems are that you need to stay on script, say a person was doing a story only about the market, (She went to the market and found a bike she rode it home) that would change the script from markets to bikes. The second problem is that you didn't describe the setting, like if someone said, (He took that ball) you could change it to (Jacob stole that green ball outside the house). The third problem is still punctuation, if someone wrote a story saying, ( Hey there my name is kate . So how is the weather . ) the first thing is quotation marks " ", put these at the front and back of someone saying something, like this ( " Hello Ariel, how are you? ") next she didn't capitalize her name, you know how to capitalize so I won't teach U. next, she put a space then a period then a space, do it like this next time, ( Polly walked to the store. ) So in conclusion, the sentence will now look like this, ( " Hey there, my name is Kate. So, how is the weather? " ) This is to help you not to discourage you! :D
