AzurePlayer

I'm thinking of tearing down my RWBY fanfic. To be honest, I don't have the imagination to continue it anymore. So, I decided to change it.
          	The revised would be a MARSOC elite sniper named Andrew Sorento who got sent to Remnant after jumping into a well to avoid an enemy gunship. It'll be set at about 14 years before season 1 of the series even happen.

Rosejai101

@AzurePlayer 
          	  You probably feel that way because there's no true direction. Maybe add a third party, who gets involved and forces the US to stretch thin. You mentioned the other parties like the reformists and pirates, but we haven't heard anything about them actually. Why aren't they try trying to get involved with basically their home world where the kingdoms are. If Mt Glenn is considered international, then why didn't some Pirates/reformists come and make a camp or something.
          	  
          	  You're also using the cliche of Atlas finding old technology to catch up, which is fine, but it's not really going to go anywhere, especially with how you explained the difference in numbers and power. In my opinion, you should had brought the reformists to Atlas and let them supply them with weapons instead of them finding a jet. Afterall they both hate Faunus. Meanwhile Instead of revealing Raven as she is, you could had made her into a pirate or something.
          	  
          	  Not only that, you should have introduced the fact that the US has allies with other aliens and are currently in a war with others. Not gonna lie, when you first brought up Galaxy, I thought there would be aliens. You could had kept it solar system level. Mars, Europa, and many other moons would had been better if it's only Earth/Remnant people(US, Reformists, Pirates)
          	  
          	  If you don't want to continue/remake this story, then can I suggest doing a Star Wars x RWBY fanfiction. The Sith/Jedi can be like the Espers while the soldiers can be... You know. Maybe during the Old Republic era, where only one ship arrives. If it's the Republic, they could help Vale capture Mt Glenn and use it as a start to unite the four kingdoms so they can join the Republic. If it's a sith, then they'll simply capture it for themselves.
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Sithlord863

@AzurePlayer Don't take it down!
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VincentXVB

@AzurePlayer Just ask someone for help with your story.
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Chancellor_Virgil

Hello @AzurePlayer, this is @Anonymous24uare speaking through @Conduit_Vance. I don't think you heard but I must inform you that I lost my original account due to it being so old that I had to pay to keep it running (I think) so I resorted to this account to (MAYBE) take a break from writing down military stories and focus others I was piqued by. Still, how are you doing, and how's school? I was just wondering if I could interest you in something that will (maybe...) make you update RWBY: Rise of the Star-Banner just a bit. If you want to speak with me clearly, I have a Discord link in my new profile's bio. Thank you.

VincentXVB

Dude! You did not just removed RWBY: Rise of the Star-Banner! You're going to receive so much back lash for this!!! Especially from @Sithlord863 or @Anonymous24uare. Put it back, PLEASE!!!

VincentXVB

My bad, just felt worried when he announced the bear cancelation. It was bad enough when @Anonymous24uare lost his account.
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Sithlord863

@VincentXVB Chill bro. I would be disappointed and annoyed yes, but I wouldn't give him hate
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AzurePlayer

I'm thinking of tearing down my RWBY fanfic. To be honest, I don't have the imagination to continue it anymore. So, I decided to change it.
          The revised would be a MARSOC elite sniper named Andrew Sorento who got sent to Remnant after jumping into a well to avoid an enemy gunship. It'll be set at about 14 years before season 1 of the series even happen.

Rosejai101

@AzurePlayer 
            You probably feel that way because there's no true direction. Maybe add a third party, who gets involved and forces the US to stretch thin. You mentioned the other parties like the reformists and pirates, but we haven't heard anything about them actually. Why aren't they try trying to get involved with basically their home world where the kingdoms are. If Mt Glenn is considered international, then why didn't some Pirates/reformists come and make a camp or something.
            
            You're also using the cliche of Atlas finding old technology to catch up, which is fine, but it's not really going to go anywhere, especially with how you explained the difference in numbers and power. In my opinion, you should had brought the reformists to Atlas and let them supply them with weapons instead of them finding a jet. Afterall they both hate Faunus. Meanwhile Instead of revealing Raven as she is, you could had made her into a pirate or something.
            
            Not only that, you should have introduced the fact that the US has allies with other aliens and are currently in a war with others. Not gonna lie, when you first brought up Galaxy, I thought there would be aliens. You could had kept it solar system level. Mars, Europa, and many other moons would had been better if it's only Earth/Remnant people(US, Reformists, Pirates)
            
            If you don't want to continue/remake this story, then can I suggest doing a Star Wars x RWBY fanfiction. The Sith/Jedi can be like the Espers while the soldiers can be... You know. Maybe during the Old Republic era, where only one ship arrives. If it's the Republic, they could help Vale capture Mt Glenn and use it as a start to unite the four kingdoms so they can join the Republic. If it's a sith, then they'll simply capture it for themselves.
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Sithlord863

@AzurePlayer Don't take it down!
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VincentXVB

@AzurePlayer Just ask someone for help with your story.
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