BelindaSmiles12

@MiaTayn  thanks alot

MiaTayn

Hello, sorry I couldn't get to you so soon, I do have a lot of people blowing up my inbox. Well I've read, and there's a lot to be fixed. A little grammar, set the setting definitely, and mood
          
          It's a bit too much revealed about her life in one chapter, if its a prologue, it's a prologue, but if its a first chapter then slow it down. Deep breath, and take it chapter by chapter. I like her personal thought and character....message me for problems. ;)