@julliet_f
No worries! It was interesting, though just a friendly tip (from author to author);
When writing, make sure your grammar is in line, it makes the work written seem more interesting. Try looking at other pieces of work it'll give you a taste of the vocabulary - e.i. WOW Words etc., If this isn't helpful, perhaps ask other authors to give it a look! It's a great way to earn followers as well as an audience.
You're book seemed generally interesting! Good luck! :)