@BiancaStarr1980 Hi, Thank you for reading my story. and No. I am not upset at all ,because you are right. Book #2 went too far from my original idea that caused weak plot. I often switch back and forth language between my own and English. That's causes what you pointed out. It becomes obvious if you read my story from the beginning as 'whole'. I appreciate someone pointing out my weakness because I can improve my writing for next time. ( Seriously, I need more than proofreading). Thank you.