@Peachy_Bakery Using this, let’s go back to the example above.
For Example: “That’s not fair!” The words spilled from her lips in a hoarse tone, a scream of anger that hid the sadness underlying it. Tears that gathered in her eyes began to fall, and like them, her knees did the same. “That’s not fair…!” She repeated, a whisper this time with anger now underlying the visible sadness.
Do you understand how I changed the wording, and added more emotional depth and attachment to the description? When writing, you have to make your readers get attached, make them feel. There are various ways to do this. But one you should know, is always break it down and be detailed with the situation. Don’t automatically assume they will understand. A reader should be able to read one chapter in the middle of your book, or one page, and quickly feel immersed even if they don’t know the plot. You have to hook them, and there aren’t many pictures so you have to paint it for them with your writing.
