Your story Dying For You is great in my opinion. The prologue is very interesting and I'd love to see what happens with that. There are no grammatical errors (and if so there are very few) that I saw. The words you used are descriptive to what it is you where talking about. But overall this story is very interesting and great. I'd love to see what happens next!
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