maryasha

Boo! lol, i recently wrote two new stories and would love to get some constructive criticism. Let me know what you think of them :]
          
          MR. HOLIER THAN THOU
          Synopsis:
          He has a twisted sense of humor and he hates my hair colour. He feeds me chokoberries just so he can kiss me and taste them from my mouth.
          The bastard is my Master.
          Alston. The atrocious Fae.
          She has the ugliest hair he has ever seen and does not appreciate his amazing sense of humor. She loses her temper and her sharp tongue can outrun any Fae he has ever known.
          The urchin is my servant.
          Méav. The raven haired ecce.
          http://www.wattpad.com/271532-mr-holier-than-thou
          Quick Fact: Over 80% of the ppl who read the Chapter 1 continue on to read Chapter 2.
          Which % are you?
          
          SHATTERED HEARTS
          Synopsis:
          Life is an empty shell if there is no one there beside you to share it with. Celest knows that all too well. After overhearing her fiancé making love with her step-sister, she shatters. Her quiet reserve is pushed aside to let out a torrent of emotions that have been boiling for the past years.
          In an attempt to distance herself from all those who belittle her, she decides to take a long trip to South America. She finds herself taking a flight to Margarita Island with one other lone passenger on the plane.
          Too bad life doesn’t always work out as planned.
          http://www.wattpad.com/310538-shattered-hearts

maryasha

hi, would you mind reading my story, i would love some constructive criticism and what you think about it
          
          "All Boy's School Survival Guide" for girls
          
          Synopsis:
          
          Aliza is in a binding situation, literally! With her breasts constricted, wearing her brother's loose clothing, and dropping her voice to the lowest level, she's attending Ascham, an all boy's school! If that's not enough, throw in an extremely hot roommate, who suspects Aliza, aka Alex, of not being exactly what "he" appears to be and you have a chaotic relationship---if you can even call it that.
          http://www.wattpad.com/257206-quot-all-boys-school-survival-guide-quot-for-girls
          
          please read until chapter 2 before u decide if you would like to continue reading the story or not :3