BlueberryBooks

@ bloodysonofagun  I think your writing is good but there are some things that aren't realistic like when the brother tells him the whole story the first time they talk. I think you can write like you already do but check for logical mistakes or unrealistic actions :)

@ bloodysonofagun  Hi! I'll read your story and tell you what I think about it, also your introducing part because I'm not sure if it gives me the right ideas what exactly your story is about. 
            In case I forget to write you just remind me again next week or so.. :D 

@ Lovexx2000  Hey! :) what kind of fanfic is your story? I'm gonna read it and tell you what I think about it. Would you do ma a favour and read my story, too? :)

@SleepyGarfield  thank you! I really like your book!