Bluesman

Hi CjayS42,
          	
          	I have stopped updating here on wattpad as I've moved on to another site.  Writer's Platform.
          	
          	regards,
          	Bluesman

MyztikalTearz

HI, Bluesman :)
          
          I was searching through books and came across yours. Are you even still here? Have you been working on this?
          
          I'd like to offer a few "wattpad" tips:
          
          http://support.wattpad.com/entries/21485458-how-do-i-add-chapters-to-my-story
          
          
          CjayS42 
          
          
          
          To upload a story is very simple.
          
          Go to the main page, and open the drop down menu next to your name. Select "my works". Click the "New story" in the upper right hand corner. The rest should be easy from there.
          
          After that, you can open my works and click the "new chapter" button to the right hand side of the story to add more parts.
          
          
          **Most wattpadders prefer each "chapter" to be in a separate heading. There is a real thirst here for great sci-fi stories. Hopefully, you'll return and break this up and post more! 
          
          Another "tip" about posting:
          Upload a chapter once or twice a week. Each upload gets featured under the "what's new" and :newness" categories - so you'll come up more frequently in those searches!

Bluesman

@SunnySideUpHayden   Hi there Sunny Side, I read the prologue and some pages of Bloody Betrayal.  My comments may be harsh though!
          
          1) The text has a mixture of present and past tense.  Should write all in past tense except for dialogues.
          
          2) There are grammatical errors.
          
          3)  Writing style need to improve.  It reads like some school project.
          
          4) You have the story but unable to bring out the tension and drama.
          
          5) Logic must be there.  Example, she has a syringe filled with powdered crank.  Can't inject powder!
          
          6) Sometimes try too hard to explain a situation and get long winded.
          
          Hope the above comments are useful.  Please read and comment on my story, Koron Wars.  Love to hear from all of you!
          
          - Bluesman

Bluesman

@SunnySideUpHayden   Hi Sunny Side, quite a few have asked me that question.  Well, I had to think of an alien race who are warlike and powerful.  Thus the name Koron came up.
          
          I've just refined some text and uploaded Chapter 2 for your reading pleasure.  I'll check out your Bloody Betrayal and get back to you with my comments.
          
          Cheers!  Bluesman