Bluewritingsng

Hi can you please check out my new book!

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@Bluewritingsng  I would like to give a review for your book, 'Children of Fallen'.
            
            Positive aspects 
            1)Popular genre-supernatural 
            2) Strong storyline
            3) You may or will not face Writers block as you have a long story ahead which is good.
            4) The start and slow nature is actually good which keeps us intrigued. 
            
            
            Suggestion to improve
            1) Images. Use some graphics and since it's supernatural use graphics it's looks good for a supernatural theme.
            
            2) Sentence allotment could be improved.
            Example: "We need to sleep now". Vaxen's mom said.
            (Creates confusion as suddenly we read statements which breaks the flow)
            
            Instead of this framing.
            Frame it like this
            
            Vaxen's mom said, "We need to sleep now". 
            
            This is clear and exquisite writing.
            
            The character who had spoken the specific statement, that specific character's name should be mentioned first. 
            
            It helps in clarity, good flow and excellent writing.
            
            That's it. Otherwise the boom is excellent.  You have a chosen a very popular theme.
            
            You will get reach on your book by the theme on it's own.
            
            Your focus should be presentation and giving the supernatural feel with images

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Thank you!

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