BobbyRoland

@kittyangelabdl I finished it. The story was fantastic! I'm not sure how I feel about a sequel, though. The ending felt just right for the first story.
          
          Regarding unexplained powers, I find that the most enthralling method is to show the powers first, then work backwards towards the "how". It's annoying when things happen for no reason, but at the same time, it isn't as exciting to explain things in the order that they occur.
          
          I would say that what is most important is having a consistent reason and sticking to it. The depth of world-building has to exist, but it doesn't have to be fully explored. Telling the readers the reason is fine, but demonstrating the "how" and "why" of it over the course of the story simply feels more powerful to me. The best stories subtly acknowledge that they are showing but a fraction of the fictional world.

@kittyangelabdl Hey Angel! That's funny that you noticed. I started this story awhile back, but I didn't get very far for some reason. IIRC, the introduction was particularly long-winded. This time, I tried starting in the middle to see if I could figure out what the story was about. It isn't too difficult to understand what's going on when dropped onto the midst, so I guess the intro isn't necessary. I'm having a ton of fun, so now I want to finish the story. 

Thank you for voting out my story, Love Stinks. I truly appreciate it!