BolideBoom

Should I edit the first two chapters of the new story 'Road to home'? They are currently third person, however my latest chapters have been first person.
          	Do you guys want it to be edited? Want to stop 1st person instead? Let me know :)

NeehaShaikh9

@BolideBoom Ok...
          	  Stay safe!!!
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BolideBoom

@ NeehaShaikh9  like I said, I didn't expect for it to be read. I'll try to keep some of this in mind but I'm no professional writer
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NeehaShaikh9

this message may be offensive 
@BolideBoom Peter is no good as a hero with super-strength if he can't protect himself outside the suit!!! He can't be Spider-man and NOT protect himself without the suit!!! Super-strength doesn't seem all that noticeable (unless it's Flash- I remember reading on Pinterest that Peter holds back MOST of his strength when fighting normal criminals, which means he can defend himself OUTSIDE the suit WITHOUT revealing his secret!!!)! He needs to know that his secret isn't worth shit if he's dead!!! Flash may be a different story, but keeping a cover isn't worth it if it means letting just ANYONE push him around and take advantage of him ALL HIS LIFE!!! His cover could attract criminals and muggers!!! Even if he considers Spidey to be a 'different person', it does not change the fact that they still share the same body- which means if Peter dies, so does Spidey!!! He may be worried about his cover, but what about the city's safety?!Won't it go for a toss, all because he was hell-bent on keeping a cover?!  Spider-man may be a good outlet to blow off some steam now, but it will become an unnecessary escape that will not let him gain the strength to deal with personal matters later in life, which will give people the opportunity to take advantage of him! And if he dies, what about the crime rates?!!! Won't it be HIS fault that they rose?!
          	  And won't CONSTANTLY acting weak outside the suit get frustrating after some time?! 
          	  Sorry, didn't mean to offend you, but this is my opinion!!!
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BolideBoom

Should I edit the first two chapters of the new story 'Road to home'? They are currently third person, however my latest chapters have been first person.
          Do you guys want it to be edited? Want to stop 1st person instead? Let me know :)

NeehaShaikh9

@BolideBoom Ok...
            Stay safe!!!
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BolideBoom

@ NeehaShaikh9  like I said, I didn't expect for it to be read. I'll try to keep some of this in mind but I'm no professional writer
• Reply

NeehaShaikh9

this message may be offensive 
@BolideBoom Peter is no good as a hero with super-strength if he can't protect himself outside the suit!!! He can't be Spider-man and NOT protect himself without the suit!!! Super-strength doesn't seem all that noticeable (unless it's Flash- I remember reading on Pinterest that Peter holds back MOST of his strength when fighting normal criminals, which means he can defend himself OUTSIDE the suit WITHOUT revealing his secret!!!)! He needs to know that his secret isn't worth shit if he's dead!!! Flash may be a different story, but keeping a cover isn't worth it if it means letting just ANYONE push him around and take advantage of him ALL HIS LIFE!!! His cover could attract criminals and muggers!!! Even if he considers Spidey to be a 'different person', it does not change the fact that they still share the same body- which means if Peter dies, so does Spidey!!! He may be worried about his cover, but what about the city's safety?!Won't it go for a toss, all because he was hell-bent on keeping a cover?!  Spider-man may be a good outlet to blow off some steam now, but it will become an unnecessary escape that will not let him gain the strength to deal with personal matters later in life, which will give people the opportunity to take advantage of him! And if he dies, what about the crime rates?!!! Won't it be HIS fault that they rose?!
            And won't CONSTANTLY acting weak outside the suit get frustrating after some time?! 
            Sorry, didn't mean to offend you, but this is my opinion!!!
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