Book Critic

Hey, would you please review my short story From Dust to Flame? Thank you so much, I really appreciate it.

hey can you read and review my story.. its really short https://www.wattpad.com/story/77056396-from-me-to-you

Hey, I'm looking for a someone to be merciless on his/her critic, i want to improve my writing. Would you check any of my fanfics, I have one of TVD/TO, another one of Marvel and other of Star Wars.
          Don't lose your love for books, EVER!!
          cheers!

I'm a book critic too XD