I'm not a hot guy. Don't tell me where you are in Maryland because it's too close. The best I can cipher from your story in French is that it is a translation of your same story in English. If English is your first language, then take care to have a native speaker of French to look it over for awkward construction. I read a brochure in Geman once that used the words booby prize when they should have said consolation prize.
But I think that it's quaint to have your story in two languages.
If you are serious about writing, you will have to lose some of the texting language where it is not apporpriate.
Good Luck.