Ok Brittany, As you see I'm
An editor, and the first time I saw this I thought it's not that bad, and then I noticed it at the end of the chapter, so now it's bugging me! The first time you were describing about intertwining are hands, and that's the WRONG word for describing this, are IS the word for describing a thing that is out there, but when your taking about what's happening between two people it needs to be OUR, so intertwining our hands, laying our foreheads together is how it needs to be said!!I'm interested otherwise, so good luck with the rest!!