Bromelon16

I've just been adding to that one part

Bromelon16

I had really intended to make that one long like that, because I couldn't find any good points to separate it at, but thanks for reading, and for the feedback, and you keep up with the great stories you have!

gracegracehasaface

Okay that's fine. Maybe it's just me. I've always thought long paragraphs were a bit intimidating and tedious. But that's usually because I read them in textbooks, not action books. 
            
            So with that being said, thank you! I can't wait to read more of your story :)
            
            ~Grace
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gracegracehasaface

First off I would just like to thank you for taking the time to read and vote for Greater Than Xander. It means a lot!!
          
          I read the first chapter and am really interested in what direction you plan to take the plot. Try to do a little editing before you publish to allow your readers to have an easier time reading. (For example: paragraph separation. There was one really long one that you might want to cut into two.) 
          
          Other than that it's good. You have great ideas so keep writing! 
          
          ~Grace