@SilentSword1010 I will be sure to do so! Yes, she has seemed pretty formidable so far! Except for the scene where she was captured and they took her blood, she hasn’t run into anyone that can give her a real challenge (although I have a ways to go). The only improvement I could see isn’t even a writing one (your writing is very strong) but a formatting one. At times you have multiple people speaking in the same paragraph, which can make it easy to mix up who is speaking. Perhaps using paragraph breaks and putting each speaker in his/her own paragraph would make for an easier read. I think that is how most novels are, but I’d need to check. Again, though, that is a formatting issue, not a writing one. Your writing is great.