Circlesnsqaures Critiquing,
HammerFall School for the Educationally Unexperienced: Year One:
I don't exactly know what to think of it. It was good in some places, strange in others and didn't make much sense in the rest. Vince confused me completely but i guess he is a good character that i hope will evolve throughout the rest of the story. The writing was a good quality -besides the grammar and spelling errors- and the plot was interesting.
I do like the way you have 'year one' put on the end of the title- this definietely gave the story a future. In turn, must keep dedication.