CamryPaige

Just finished alpha black and I think it was amazing will you be updating the warrior anytime soon can't wait to read it.

Part 3
          
          I do not have a date for the finished product. If you ask for an update on the book, I will give you an honest one, but I will not make anymore promises because I suck at keeping them. At this point in time, I have the first 5 chapters as well as a prologue for the story completed. It is written in third person and will not have any first person points of view. The story that I have written so far is about 40 pages long so far, I am estimating the new version to have just as many if not more chapters than the original and to be at least 300 pages, which I believe is still up to read if you wish to read it. Please know the new version will be very different in both the way the story is written as well as the characters relationships and how they come to know each other. 
          
          I love you all and the support you all show by voting and commenting on all my other stories, I se them all. I hope you guys continue to stick around for the ride, it's certainly a roller coaster for me, but I understand if you hold your breath. I wish you all the best.
          
          Camry

Part 2
          
          When I started rewriting Adopted By The Mafia King, I held a poll and selected 6(?) people to receive the first 10-15 chapters for free as I was writing them to read over them and to give me their honest feedback of how the story was progressing as well as how it sounded and could be improved. I did the poll to incentivize myself to write so that I wouldn't take forever and so that I had someone keeping me on track, but as I mentioned before, fuck deadlines and long story short, it didn't work. Those individuals will still be getting a dedication spot at the beginning of the story when it is finished, and they will get the choice to decide between a free hard-copy of the book or a free digital-copy, but I will not continue to send them the first chapters, just incase the new system I have discovered, that works for me, stops working.
          
          My new system, if anyone wants to try it for themselves. I have discovered text-to-speech both on my phone and on the computer. I know its not a new thing, but whatever. It works really well for me and helps me hear the story in a voice other than my own, which can get a little annoying after a while. It's definitely helping the story progress and it also makes it easier to hear discrepancies in punctuation and spelling.

I've been working on editing Adopted By The Mafia King for quite some time now, and I do realize how long its taking and that a lot of you may be very irritate and frustrated with me. I wrote Adopted By The Mafia King when I was 15, yes, its very evident with my older writing style, I know. I'm 22 years old now and I kinda, lowkey, hate it. I love the story and the plot behind it, but I strongly dislike how childish it sounds and the fact that it is written from Chloe's point of view at all and that it swaps points of view, sometimes multiple times in the same chapter. It also sounds quite inappropriate in some places where the statements where completely innocent, but this is Wattpad, and y'all are made from a different breed, love you, but damn. 
          
          I really want to stress that it is NOT an abandoned project. The whole story is being rewritten, but to help keep things flowing and to help with writers block, I've started many (seriously, like 10) side projects, including this new book Baby Doll, to help with frustration and to help things keep moving. Writing isn't fun when its forced and its also really bad. Emotions like author frustration definitely start to bleed into the project when they start to become disinterested in their work, which is another reason why I've never gotten an agent to help keep the project on track, I fucking hate deadlines more than anything. That is also probably the reason why giving myself deadlines never worked either.

Hi are u still continuing ur stories ?

I can't see the first carter book has it been taken down?

Heyy!! I just finished reading ABTMK. It was INCREDIBLE!!! I felt a lot of emotions. I just wanted to ask if the second book is completed or not? If it's not completed....where can I get the next chapters?
          
          Hope u have a good day!!
          Take care
          May God bless y
          
          

I believe the fist chapter was very good actually I don’t think you should change anything I just can’t really give you any feedback if you should leave it at the beginning of the book as you have it or change its place and put it somewhere in the middle. That is  because you haven’t written other chapters to see where I believe it would have been better. It is a very good chapter though, the only thing I would give you my opinion on is that if you are considering of leaving the chapter that you just posted as the first one,the other chapters should give a little explaining of the role that each character has or give like a background story for each character whichever one you prefer. That is the only thing. But it is starting very good keep up with the amazing work!! 

Hi I was reading your books adopted by the mafia king and take my hand. But at some point your first book was taken down so I continued with the second one. I can’t explain to you how amazing your book was up to the point that I had read it. The sentimental part the sweet actions of Alfonso towards chloe I just have no words you are an amazing writer that is a talent that you have and I really hope you get to continue with your work. Now about your books the first one I would think that the ending should be related to the beginning of your book. A friend of mine that had asked me to suggest a book from wattpad I had told her about your book and she finished the first one before you took it down she told me that chloe was kidnapped from Alfonso’s enemies. But I told her that I didn’t want her to spoil everything so if you are going to continue on your second book I believe that it should be about chloe getting comfortable with everyone again. You are a very good writer and I hope you can succeed on finishing your books.

Congratulations to:
          -CINNAMONROLLSS 
          -witch_of_scarlett
          -immablond 
          -NeedMooreDee 
          -venoly17 
          -KaterinaDubois 
          -anthoula2000 
          
          Thank you to everyone for participating and giving feedback. I greatly appreciate it but these are the people that I feel helped the most. I know that I said that I’d pick 20 from each book, but I tried to avoid the comments mostly about praise. I tried to pick comments based around giving feedback rather than praise. Please watch your PM/DM for a message from me tomorrow. I’ll be sending each of the winners a request for a good email to send the chapters to.