IlikeFluff7
Sorry that I'm moving this here but I hate the short comments in the books . I think your story is very promising, that's why I'm writing this (as a somewhat seasoned author) to hopefully be of use to your personal development. Please be mindful of how often you let them break the fourth wall, I used to make the mistake that I abused that stilistic and I ended up being obnoxious to read because I put the author too much in the foreground of the story. I learned this from my personal experience, of course it's entirely up to you to decide if you think of this advice as useful or not. It's also your decision of you want to continue with that style to try and learn your own style, regardless I will wait patiently for updates for your story ❤️
Capybara2372023
@IlikeFluff7 aww thx but I hate burst your bubble but this concept will sadly only be expanded some while after Peter becomes spider man. Btw the about the entity I told the ‘author’ supposedly was, just wanted to hint that their not necessarily alive, it’s quite a straightforward reason why the author exists but I wanted to connect it with the reader’s backstory! Happy reading!
IlikeFluff7
@ Capybara2372023 yeah, I already guessed that about the author, I just didn't know how to name the narrator anything else when I wrote it . I'm happily waiting for your next chapter and now you just made me much more hyped for it. Love and regards from me ❤️
Capybara2372023
@IlikeFluff7 Though I love the advice, and I honestly appreciate it. I wasn’t exactly planning on abusing the plot point but rather including the supposed “author” into the story, I wanted them to be a kind of entity that would actually affect the story rather than the character simply breaking the fourth wall for comedic relief, almost sort of like venom but rather someone only the reader’s ‘know’ and an entity that’s revealed later in the story. Genuinely appreciate your concern and I’ll definitely keep it in mind when writing the story ❤️ *spoiler* the author is not really the author, the reader just refers to them as such for fun, their rather like an entity in the reader’s mind that indirectly affects the plot, it will be expanded later on in the story. For now I’m just sort of cementing the author in as a character so that I can develop them.