@ChanelSpiegel
hello I invite you to read my collection of poems I hope you like it, link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/290621853?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=Chavezp24&wp_originator=v3x4eF%2BS7Xc8nR4S8nXcoE2CMz7tXYL%2Blh3a0d0Dy9Td3pkYo0ZqLEMrkkZuwwIKn%2BxSvotz0OhU4JBij%2Fnq%2B5R2ypnNHAWBmXutPqQvD%2BQYuEqIBSwAlKO1Sk0u40D6
I read your work. The poems are excellent! I'd only make a few tweaks. 1. I'd suggest starting starting a new "chapter" for each poem. It will look more professional and clean. 2. The first poem, it rhymed once or twice. I don't know whether it was intentional, but rhyhming the last words is an old school thing. But I say there's no rules against rhyming in poetry. It just not really done anymore. 3. You should definitely use periods at the end of each line to show when a new line is started. 4. Your first poem didn't have a title, there were a few repeat words within a sentence, but that might have been the automatic keyboard's fault. All in all great job! You're a lovely soul and I encourage you to continue writing. You have talent and something to share with the world.
Thank you so much for this. Yeah that was my intention some sort of like an old school and I’ll call I’ll never really ask for poetry like that it’s one of my iPhone to my refrigerator I wish I love you more than I need to change the story of a girl I really appreciate you. I kind of Proud it with the intention of being old-school and I wrote it while I was if that depressive you. It really needs a lotPlease share so that I can better hone my skill!!!
