CharlotteUP

@jt_giles1 I do like your book, and I will be reading on. A little thing I've been thinking of is your dialogs. They feel a little hard to read, like they don't flow the way they should, you could perhaps look into that (maybe not use everyones names in every sentences? Or corporate some more slang words?). And also I think you should look into the part where he falls into a tunnel and suddenly is in this big ehm, well thats the problem, where are they, in a house or under ground (in that case K can't look out the window can she?) just explain where he is I think I'm meaning. Other than that I love the idea of the story and the way it's comming along. There are a couple of great ideas in your story that comes as suprises, I do like me some suprises. Keep it up :D

hollygal123

I noticed that you like fantasy books and I LOVE them too! I mostly write and read about fantasy I love that it can take you to a whole other world!!

CharlotteUP

Yup, and that is only one reason to read fantasy, I also love the mix of any types of magic and romance, it just never goes wrong. :)
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ch4rmed

Hey Charlotte! I just wanted to say thanks so much for reading Almost Loved and sticking with it from when I first started! I noticed that you've started the short story as well and I'm so touched that you're taking the time to do that :) Thank you so much for the support ♥

ch4rmed

@CharlotteUP You flatterer, you ;) I like to think crying's kind of cathartic, so happy you're on the same page with that haha
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CharlotteUP

Well it is kind of hard to put down something you like :) and by the way, your short story was gripping, heartbreaking and totally lovely, cried true the whole ending when I got the "memo". I do love me some tears now and then, I feel it's good for the soul :D
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jt_giles1

Thanks for the constructive criticism!!! It's kind of hard to find someone on wattpad that can give you advice like you did, and as  I read it, I realized you were completely right. So, I'm going to make sure I go back and explain the unexplained, and check out the dialogue also. But thanks for the time you took to read The Elementers and give me advice on it :D

CharlotteUP

@jt_giles1 I do like your book, and I will be reading on. A little thing I've been thinking of is your dialogs. They feel a little hard to read, like they don't flow the way they should, you could perhaps look into that (maybe not use everyones names in every sentences? Or corporate some more slang words?). And also I think you should look into the part where he falls into a tunnel and suddenly is in this big ehm, well thats the problem, where are they, in a house or under ground (in that case K can't look out the window can she?) just explain where he is I think I'm meaning. Other than that I love the idea of the story and the way it's comming along. There are a couple of great ideas in your story that comes as suprises, I do like me some suprises. Keep it up :D