I read the first chapter and the events that occur are alright, but you should try to put in conjuctions (ex: as, and...) and maybe stretch things out, for example you can add in details so it does not seem like the story is moving too fast, You also have some grammer errors, but they can be fixed easily.
Overall, the first chapter is not bad, but it can use some fixing.
I do not mean to offend you with all of the above, I am just letting you know what can be fixed so you can grow as a writer.
I wish you the best of luck : )
