@CherryFlicks
https://www.wco.tv/anime/miraculous-ladybug https://miraculousladybug.fandom.com/wiki/Season_1 https://miraculous.to/en/episodes these links can help with your miraculous story if you want them dude.
@GSP1230 Thank you. Miraculous.to is actually what I use already, but I really appreciate it.
Cherry! I’m so sorry! I didn’t great you happy birthday last month!
Cherry! I’m done with my exam!
Hey, Cherry! I’m planning on writing a new story here ( my remaining readers will be furious to know I am, yet again, starting a new story. I think it’s safe to keep some of the stories here. ) and since you’re one of the best writers I know, could you perhaps be editor?
Hullooo! How are you?
Sorry, I didn’t see this earlier! I’m fine, kinda sweaty due to the heat here. I’ve just come back from preforming in the orchestra at my school! They require us to wear long black skirts and shirts, so yeah, it’s very hot. Thanks for asking!
@FaunFiona Hi! Good thank you, a bit soggy because it's raining here and I've just been out for a walk. How are you?
We can finally talk in privatee!
@FaunFiona I'm pretty sure anyone on my profile can read these messages, but I can't say it really bothers me.
Cherry!!!
I know, why did I change my name? Well, incase this doesn’t work, I can just go back on it.
I have this story that I've been writing as a fanfic for My Hero Acadamia and I was wondering if you'd check it out and give me some pointers. https://www.quotev.com/story/16639432/The-Son-of-All-for-One/1
Thanks for the advice my writing style can be a bit monotonous but this story was kind of written to be a story in the style of a biography. I do need to break up my sentence structure a bit more and will try to add more emotion. Mostly though emotion is a bit gone to spare the readers a bit of the endless emotional suffering going on in Kazuaki. I think you nailed what I need to improve on so thank you.
@MythHunter3495 Plus, the way you write doesn't feel like you're telling a story so much as writing a biography. It feels factual and unemotional, which I think is mainly attributed to your consistent sentence lengths. If you varied this a bit more, it would not only draw the readers attention to certain parts more, it would also give it feeling, stopping it from feeling so monotonous.
@MythHunter3495 I've read all of it now, and I've got a couple of comments. Of course, there are the normal little things like spelling errors and missing punctuation, but I'm not too concerned about that. There are also a few times when you repeat the same word again and again until it becomes boring, and there's once when you repeat a whole paragraph (the one about questions→answers →death).
