So I read your teaser, and I liked it, but I have a few questions, like, who's point of view is it in and what is their name? The only suggestion I have is make sure you space out your paragraphs, so it doesn't seem so long. But other than that, I really enjoyed it and I think you should update and give it a title, etc. Oh, and thank you for dedicating it to me, that meant a whole lot!