Failed Knight

Hi please take a look of my very first chapter that I published on my page and please let me know what you think of it. Thank you have a great day/night; https://my.w.tt/rr8ZSUr3w7

Hello‼️Thanks for following me‼️If you’re interested in checking out my book In a Heartbeat, any feedback would be appreciated‼️❤️:)
          @ChrustyCrab