Collettedera

As we celebrate the birth of our Lord, may this Christmas fill your life with new hope, positivity, joy and bliss. Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year in advance to you and your dear ones!

Collettedera

Hi, everyone. Thanks to all those who have read my book and commented on it. I appreciate.
          
          I would like to apologise for the delay in regards to my second book. I could not update it due to some personal issues but I will try to do so soon. Please be open minded because it is a little different from my first book.
          
          Also, if you liked my book "the Billionaire's Proposition", I would really appreciate it if you could go to my page on Amazon to write a positive review for this book. I have an edited version there. See the link below.
          https://www.amazon.com/dp/B08HLMKJCG
          
          Thanks everyone. Love you all.

Collettedera

Hello everyone. Thanks for continuing to read my story and also for the comments. I really appreciate your feedback.
          I know it's been long since my first book, but I am starting a new one. I will try to update as often as possible. Please read and tell me what you think.
          Thanks!!!

TaniHanes

Thanks for adding Pete and Daisy to your reading list! I hope you enjoy it :o)

TaniHanes

I looked at the first few chapters, and here are my notes: I seems like English might not be your first language? So that issue would need to be addressed, because it can be distracting, sometimes. It's a clever idea, a nice hook for a book! You need to show in dialogue some of the parts you explain in prose; instead of putting in an "info dump" the whole section where you explain the background of how they wound up where they are, you probably need a flashback chapter with dialogue and everything. It's more powerful than just explanation, you know? Like have the woman tell the young man she's leaving him and marrying the father, and tell how he feels in that moment? 
            I hope these notes help a little, and best of luck to you!
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Collettedera

@TaniHanes i loved it. It was very interesting. Do try to read my book The Billionaire's Proposition and tell me what you think about it. I would love your opinion
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