@Jfrench13 First, I'd just like to thank you again, so much for the feedback! I'm really happy to hear that it came across the way I wanted it to and that the characters I created were believable. I've been working on editing everything these past few days little by little getting ready to repost the entire story. So far, I have Chapter 1, 2, 3 and 4 done. So technically, I'm half way there! Once I've reworked the entire thing, I'll let you know because I would love to swap chapter reviews/critiques/edits. I'm always looking for feedback and things to improve on with my work. I think these recent edits will clear up the plot holes I've left and correct the sentences that didn't make all that much sense in your last read. I'm hoping by the beginning of next week to post up chapters 9 and 10 also.
I just started reading your book just a little while ago and I'm hoping to finish a few chapters before I go to bed. Thanks again for taking the interest in my book. You rock.
Cheers,
- Christoph