@TenaeSpencer I have read your story and let me say... I really thoroughly enjoyed it! It was an easy read and the descriptions were fantastical! For a new writer you have a lot of talent and potential! I could definitely see a bright future for you! Of course there are a couple of things that aren't perfect like the format... It's supposed to be on the left-hand side, that's an easy fix though. Another thing, when different people are speaking at a time you might wanna put them in different paragraphs showing that there are two people talking. I saw someone trying to help you out in the comments and she was really good at explaining stuff. I really like your story and I hope you keep on going strong with it, You're doing a great job. Don't be scared of writing if the worst thing that can happen is if people don't like it, write to make yourself happy and if they don't like it then screw them. They can't recognize true talent when they see it.
