CrazyLittleDino

Waaah~~
          	
          	I WOULD LIKE TO APOLOGIZE TO EVERYONE for not being able to update these days. I have been busy with work and my time was always full for OTs and other stuff. 
          	
          	But if you really really really really can't wait for my update, every raw link for my translated novels are posted on the story descriptions. You can use those links to continue reading.
          	= Just adjust the settings of your google chrome for an automatic translation for easy reading.
          	
          	Okayyy!!!.

MissdoubleAce

One thing I didn't like was that before each chapter and author's note, you didn't give enough line spaces. You gave just one for each, which is wrong because you give a line space for each paragraph, so you had me and one or two others, I'm sure, thinking that it was part of the first chapter's story, when it's actually just an author's note and another chapter. So please, give like 3 more lines before another chapter next time.  Maybe just 2 for the author's note. 
          
          I also didn't like when you wrote the characters' names wrongly. That happened a few times in the story. I also don't like that you didn't clearly write the names of certain things and I had to continue reading for a bit, to actually understand what you were trying to say. E.g: TT is condom, according to the story. But that means nothing in English. I don't know if it actually means something in your language or where you're from.  There were a couple of other things like that. 
          
          Suggestion: if you don't want to outrightly state the names of some things, you could give the readers a clue or two and have them guess what it is.  For example; you could say F.U or F*** you, if you don't want to curse. Or something like D**n it! Or in your case, give a short or an 'author's note', telling the readers that 'TT' is actually 'prorection' during sex. So that those that didn't initially get it, like me, can understand what you mean.
          
          All in all... A work well done! Great work!!
          Bravo!!!

MissdoubleAce

My review on your story 'Dressed as the boss's ex-girlfriend'
          
          Lovely story,  I like the fact that the characters move at their own pace. And the plot is not too fast or too slow.  
          
          I really appreciate that you made Shen Nian, who isn't like other females who are so obsessed with the male lead and throw out their values. Going to the male lead for everything, and can't do anything without him. Those writers make the females seem weak and unable to stand up for herself, or decide on something, or practically just do anything without the lead male. 
          
          I love that you made the Male Lead troubled in one or two areas unlike others that make it seem like the guys can do anything and they never make mistakes or have to learn anything. I really love that the Male Lead is smart and can piece things together quickly without dragging things for too long and wasting the time of the readers. 
          
          I also really love that you wrote a chapter or two on the side characters, where you explained their meeting, and things going on in their separate lives, in the same book and without interfering with the leads. 
          
          Wonderful work with the ex-FL, I appreciate that you didn't make her Soo obsessed with the ML when she saw him and the lead female together, unlike most writers. And that when she figured out about the dream, she didn't try to use that as a leverage against the Female Lead but instead talked to her about it, that's nice!  She also went on to live her life well without disrupting or separating the Male and Female leads, I love that!

MissdoubleAce

You also skipped chapters, A Whole Lot! And that made it hard to read and understand the story properly. Even the numbering of the chapters weren't in appropriate order. The listing was way off as well!
          
          Fourthly, sometimes you get the names of the cast or characters wrong. You either say the right name at the wrong time, or you say the wrong name at the right time, which ever you prefer. You also misspelt a couple of names, which had me wondering if they were another person.
          Fifthly, you as well repeated a few things. Like the chapters, only to leave the numbering unchanged. Some scenes were also repeated differently. And a few paragraphs and pages were copied, in the different chapters.
          
          Sixthly, There are way, way, Like WAY.. too many paragraphs in this story. It was like.. after each sentence there was another paragraph, which is wrong by the way. And some things or sentences that were supposed to go together, weren't, because of this mistake.
          
          Seventhly, when you want to leave a message at the end of a chapter, you HAVE to give a couple of lines / spaces for clarity purposes! You didn't, by the way, which was also wrong.
          
          Basically, after the first half of the story, the mistakes just kept on getting more obvious. And each one was worse than the last!!! 
          
          So please, I hope that you rectify all of them before you lose some readers.  
             I almost didn't read this story after reading it's title, a was prejudiced about it but decided to keep my opinions to myself and give it a chance but of course, you have to listen to your heart and mind and trust your gut because needless to say, I was quite disappointed with this result.
          This is why it's good to re-read a story before sending it out or posting it. And even if mistakes are discovered after the post, you could just edit and correct them. You could also drop an 'Author or writer's note' if you're worried the viewers may take it the wrong way.

MissdoubleAce

This is my review on your story titled 'The Beast World is Coming : Close the door and release the Beast Master'
          
          First off, that title doesn't really show any relation to the actual story. And what exactly is that supposed to mean?! Not once when I read this story did that sentence make any sense AT ALL. 
          Just so you know, the title of a story is supposed to showcase the meaning or point of the story, even if it's JUST! ONE! PART!
          And if not, while reading or after reading the story, the readers should at least be able to relate or understand the title to the actual story. Which wasn't the same in your case.
          
          Secondly, there were a lot of grammatical errors present. I'm not saying you should be perfect, because no one is but the errors in this story were just too much to handle! 
          
          Thirdly, apart from the misspelling of words, the gap in the plot, between the storylines, was just too much as well. While reading, I discovered that you skipped, A LOT. When you ended a chapter, it didn't really end well. Other than the fact that the end of the chapters were OBVIOUSLY incomplete, you also started the next chapter on a different note, that most of the time, made it obvious that it was another scene, and not a completion of the last.

CherryIsAGoodGirl

Hi guys, please help me, I can't even sleep because I want to read that novel plsss(and i'm sry about my english skill TwT)
          
          FL knows that in the original storyline line original owner fights over a treasure(some kind of jade?) in secret realm with the original female lead and is killed by the original female lead. But only after FL transmigrated into the novel and she goes to her mother (who has a lot of male dancers), her mother(one of the clan elders) give her that jade which seems to be a treasure from the original storylines as if it's just a toy. So she realized she was a rich guy's daughter.
          
          The female lead transmigrated into a cultivation novel and her parents are elders from the sect and her parents are not married. Her mother is like a playgirl (ldk TwT) that two big guys made a mistake and gave birth to her but they do love her. FL and ML are engaged and ML is in the upper realm bec he ascended? When the secret realm opens ML come to the lower realm with a fake body to annul their engagement by compensating her with some treasure. When they are in a secret realm ML falls for FL early and when ML tries to marry FL, she substitutes the original FL in their wedding. Only after the bride comes to upper realm with a bird flying carriage or whatever, ML realizes the FL tricks him. So he get angry and tore open the boundary of the lower realm and comes with his real body that he gets backlashes like vomiting blood or whatever. Help me!!! I'm dying bec I wanna read that sh!t

FancyFeatures

          
          "I saw your cat story, which reminds me of a story whose name I forgot. It’s about a white cat whose owner owns a clothing shop. One night, something happens in the shop, and the cat senses danger, so she flees to a faraway place. However, she doesn't recognize any buildings or streets, and from then on, she becomes homeless. One time, when she is hungry and has to fight for food, a black cat, bigger than any other cats, gives her his food. Sometimes she meets him, sometimes not. Then one day, a man adopts her, but she feels that he is not normal. The story is set in a supernatural game world, and the white and black cats are the protagonists."